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能幫我評評或者微修這首詩嗎?
Aug 3rd 2013, 16:34

如題,希望各位大大下手輕一點.......我很容易受到傷害.....
此詩不押韻,不平仄。
我是超級新手,如有須改過的辭句,請不吝提出,讓我增見。

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